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Bailee and Hiwarau camp writing.

Adding Detail To Sentences

A complex sentence has more than one clause. It has added detail giving the reader more information. It adds interest and makes writing JUICY.

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Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course.

At Kawau Island for our activity Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course.

Mr Jacobsen who is trained in safety and first aid was our coach on the large wooden, and very challenging confidence course.

Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course which is a ropes and wood set of activities at Camp Bentzon.

I was nervous about sailing on camp.

At Camp Bentzon I was nervous about sailing on camp.

I was nervous and beginning to shake about sailing the tiny wobbly optimist boats at camp.

I was nervous about sailing on camp but I soon learnt that the worst thing that could happen was that I would get a free swim!!

I was nervous about sailing on camp because I thought I was going to tip over

After looking up at the terrifying wall we went abseiling.

We went to the abseiling course

Kawau Ksland

Next week the year six'es are going to camp at Kawau island and I would like to go fishing because I go fishing at Waheki island.

The whisper

In my story there are a sheep and two men.The men's names are Bob,Boxy and the sheeps name is Roxy. They live up north there coulcher is mouri

One day Roxy was eating grass over on the paddock she was all alone well thats what she thourt. She wanted to stay away from the crowd of sheep they were so noisy and boring for Roxy. Thats why she wandered off alone so it’s not to noisy.

Then she heard a noise it sounded like someone was whispering. It sounded like they were saying lets get the sheep thats alone in the small paddock. It was Boxy and Bob “there going to put me in the ice-erlator room where they freas the sheep and then chop me up and then eat me”said Roxy.

“Aaaa someone help me Boxy and Bob are chasing after me and i’m slowing down” said Roxy “aaa there got me i’m going to die know smash Roxy hits the ice in the ice-erlator room it’s so cold I can’t breath”said Roxy.Then the next day Roxy was not seen again

The Little Pigs

The Big Flood

In my story there are three pigs trapped on a broken roof and they live on a farm there names were bob log and frog

The pigs are jumping on the roof “why are we on the roof mum” said little pig

“because there is a big flood coming” said mummy pig

There are some pigs trapped pigs on a broken roof and there’s a big farm behind the pigs.It looks frezzing for them

Oh no the pigs are sinking I think the mum is the heaviest of them all because she has all the milk.“yes here comes the rescue boat to save us so where not going to die” said little pig.

paragrah 1

The Accident

One day there was a boy called Sean Bob’s his uncle. Bob said “you can hop on my four wheeler” “thanks Bob” said Sean. You're the best Bob said sean.

And then Sean went riding of on the four wheeler. 1 our latter sean didn’t come back then Bob and Sean's Dad went to find him.

Then they heard a little sound saying “help help someone help” it was sean stuck under the four wheeler his legs were broken. Sean’s Dad called 911 Bob tried pushing the four wheeler of Sean.

Sean was balling his eyes out aaaaaaaaaa. Then the cops come to help push the four wheeler of and get him to the hospital

His bonus were split up. The doctors were putting a cars around his leg. Then the doctors came out and said that his leg will be broken for the houl summer.

The End

Bailee Laming Time

Sea Salts Bad Day

Sea Salts Big Day

“I loved the the summer  because  It was so warm now Its winter and Its so could” said sea salt. My name is Sea Salt and  I live at Avenel Station where the snowy mountains are. The only thing I do all day is grazing It Is so yum munch,munch immm so yum. I'm a ewe by the way, and I have never had my wool shorn. Because I’m only one years old.

“Oh no its the sheepdogs” said sea salt “They're coming to get use every one lets hide” said sea salt. The dogs are on a four wheeler and its very  scary for the sheep. What are we going to do now?”said sea salt

“Run the sheepdogs are after us there so scary and vicious. It seems like there going to eat us. And those people try and put worm stuff inside us and It Is so sore” said Sea salt

“Oh no I’m In the old stinky place I'm so squashed and hot and the wind Is blowing hard out and its so strong. The other sheep on the sides are so cold because they're not coming together said Sea salt.  

“Oh no Its the sheepdogs and there standing on us. And it looks very sore I don’t want those sheepdogs standing on me but they're so scary they always bark and try bit us its so mean I wish we could do that’ said Sea salt.

“Oh Its so boring again we are going to be waiting here forever and I'm scared a little

and I don’t even like being here I hate It”said Sea salt

“Aaaaaaaaaa I'm getting shorn and It Is so nosey. I'm so fritted this Is not cool I’m getting shorn and its not nice” said sea salt.

“Oh no this Is so embarrassing. I’m naked and It feels so warm and breezy and I don’t have any fear on me know. I don't want to be like this”said Sea salt.

“I’m going to eat some grass now. So my fear can grow back so I’m not inbarist said Sea salt now that is what happens in a sheep farm.

The End

bailee Moari

The Boy Who Cried Wolf

Here is my score

Cross Country

Mrs Jarman was getting everyone on the start line and Mr Burt did the siren to go run.I felt very nervous and scared.

I was trying to come first but I had  a stitch and that is why I came six place in the race on Thursday.

I came 6 when I went past the finish line it looked like a bonse kasile the end part was the best I was tired at the end I needed a big drink of water. I had a stitch it felt like I had a knife on the side of my waist.

moire

Rimming couplets

On the humongous tree

There are a couple of bees

There is a tiny rocket

In my incy wincy pocket

I had a small crown

That was light brown

speech Marks

WALT - use speech marks to show direct speaking.

Fill in the Speech Marks:


. ‘I am tired’ the boy said and then drifted off to sleep.

. ‘Oh no!’ cried Jake. ‘I don't want to go swimming’!

. ‘Is that what you were after?’ asked Sally.

Three Little Pigs

Once upon a time there were three little pigs there names wear Bob,Job and Log. So there Mum said''that you are too old to stay her''. So the little pigs went to build all of there own  houses.

Bob the first pig was not so smart.because he was building his house out of straw he was so fast he did it in 5c.It looked like a dump full of hay.

But then the little pig heard a wolf the’’little pig little pig let me in’’ said the wolf ‘’not by the hair on my chiny chin chin’’said Bob‘’then I will huff and i'll puff and blow your house down’’ and the house went down and the wolf ate Bob.

Job the second pig was a little smarter he built his house out of sticks it looked like a little hobo house.

Then Job heard the wolf and went into the house.”Little pig little pig let me in’’ said the wolf ‘’not by the hair on my chiny chin chin’’said Job.’’Then i’ll huff and i’ll puff and blow your house down said the wolf.And then Job tried to run away but bad wolf ate Job.

Log the third little pig was the smarter of them all so log went and built his house out of bricks  

his house looked like a groovy house.

So the wolf came out and said’’little pig little pig let me in’’ said the wolf ‘’not by the hair on my chiny chin chin’’ said log ‘’then i’ll huff and i’ll puff and blow your house down’’ said the wolf the house did not fall or even move a bit.

Then the wolf said ‘’I need another plan’’ then he thought of one really quick and went on the roof and said‘’i'm coming down to eat you’’.

Then the little pig put a hot boiling pot of hot water then the wolf went down the chimney and died in the pot of boiling water’’aw its tea for later said log.

The End

maori colours

red: whero

blue: kikorangi

green: kakariki

orang: parakaraka

yellow: kowhai

purple: poroporo

My weekend

My weekend

Hi my name is Bailee and I am telling you what I think happened.

                                 

I wish I could go there one day and see all the sea animals and mammals. I have been there once before and it was great.

But did you know that mammals are just like us but animals aren't because animals lay eggs and mammals do not lay eggs that is so weird. If I went there I would’of seen sharks, sting rays, seahorses, penguins, slimy eels and all kinds of stuff I don't know because I haven't been there before. I think people saw  little penguins at Kelly Toltins and maybe big hammerhead sharks to.

My Weekend

My weekend

Hi my name is Bailee and I am telling you what I think happened.

                                 

I wish I could go there one day and see all the sea animals and mammals.

But did you know that mammals are just like us but animals aren't because animals lay eggs and mammals do not lay eggs that is so weird.

If I went there I would’of seen sharks,sting rays,seahorses,penguins,slimy eels and all kinds of stuff I don't know because I haven't been there before.                                                             

                                                                                                                                                          I think people saw  little penguins at Kelly Toltins and maybe big hammerhead sharks to.

Adding to the end

Akiko works in a sushi bar where she cuts seaweed up,and puts rice and different meat in.

baleen whales eat plankton and krill,because they have no teeth to eat big fish.

Learning my time tables is important,because it helps when you get up to dividerbys 4

Food Chain

Chris Food Chain from Team 4 Pes on Vimeo.

We are showing you the food chain.

Seals

WALT - add detail to the end of sentences.

Antarctic seals have a thick layer of blubber under their skin,that keeps them warm throw the winter.

During winter, the sun does not rise in Antarctica,so the sun does not rise for 3 months in the winter.

Leopard seals pray on Antarctica Penguins,because it is their favourite food.

Mr Burt

WALT add detail to the middle of sentences

Mr Burt, who is really good at playing the guitar, takes assemblies on Friday.

Mr Burt, who loves kids, takes assemblies on Friday.

Mr Burt, who is the principal of Pt England School, takes assemblies on Friday.

Mr Burt takes assemblies, where we sing the National Anthem, on Friday.

Mr Burt takes assemblies, where we get prizes, on Friday.

Mr Burt is really good at making us laugh but sometimes he tries to cracks jokes and loves kids a lot he gives us prices on Friday too.

THE HOUSE

this is my parallelogram I picked it because it was the easy east one to do for the parallelogram
you need two small triangle,one normal triangle,two big triangle and one square.

I picked the house because it was my first one i did.

easter

In the weekend it was Easter and my mum and my dad and aunt y was hiding the Easter eggs.And my cousins come over.there name were logon teano kaynen josh and daniela

We had to find 2 pries eggs 2 color eggs 6 little eggs 1 lollipop and we are finished it all and we ate them all.It was yum y in my to pries eggs were a t- racks and a pole bear.The pole bear had fey stuff on his tome it felt a little soft and hard to.

And after that i got sick of chocolate my tummy was hurting so bad it was could a tummy AK i thought i was going to spew up on the ground. On Monday i had a sleepover at my cousins house. We were playing halo 4 on the Xbox-360 one of us is a flood and three of us is a halo person. And we played sky-rim it was a awesome game.

DANCING TO THE BEAT

Our camp item is the dance and I think I did good.
Op Stars from Team 4 Pes on Vimeo.

popcorn

When i was in my tent  i heard teaches talking at night time i couldn't even go to sleep.
The ground was hard and it was too noisy, so i ate some lollies and a little toast it was yum. In the morning it was dripping on the wall. On the next night tame got told off by a man.

Eating the smoked fish was one of my favourite thing to do.and seeing a cat fish.

My Omaru Creek Model

Bailee Blak

The disper
Once there was three people who saved town there names were John, Electra and Finn.I will tell you what happened there were three

Pt England School

I am at Pt England School in 2013.